The Ice Storm
The ice storm came down on the town like a bout of depression. It started on Saturday and ended Monday. The day the ice melted is suspended, as it changes from person to person.
The ice storm came in the night and left the roads choked and slushed. The ground became frozen sponges beneath people’s feet. Dogs turned to popsicles and teenage lovers were sealed in their parents’ cars.
This is obviously not done. But please leave feedback.
Hah! It's a wonderful start! You sweet thang, you. Thinkin' this would be the beginning or the middle? I think it would work well as either, honestly.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea that teenage lovers were sealed in their parents' cars. That made me giggle. The last sentence of the first paragraphlet changes in tense, and I am not sure if that is intentional on your part or not.
whatev' though, dawg. I think this is pretty swish and you should continuate it. If it's the middle of the story, you need some sort of outcast character who saves the day through the power of love, and if it's the beginning of the story, you need one lone person who spends years developing a fire-breathing technique to save people, but by the time he refines it, everyone has died in their private icebergs.