Bald poets grin in mug shots shown
while bearded boys crash cars
headlong with qhite trucks
blondes celebrate birthdays in the corner
with dancing people taking up her floor
Russian women kill chickens
becase it's her dream to have red sleeves
and Mirror Men die of disease
Hey Lucas, awesome job on the freewrites. There's a lot of great imagery here (my favorite is the Russian chicken-killer). I would work on expanding and posting longer drafts. I've always found it easier to cut language that to add it later.
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